Moriah Leila

I like this piece, it is very descriptive and the mystery of it all makes me want to read more so that I can know more. That being said here ...

Here it is folks, newly edited. Hope you enjoy! Josette impatiently paced the length of her Father’s lodgings. It infuriated her that her Father always locked her up right before ...

For any new reviewers is this is the old edition of my story. If you'd like to read a much better version just read The Dark Goddess the new and ...

I think I might have skipped around on my tenses, but I'm not sure and if I did how do I fix it? Critiques are gladly accepted. It is three-thirty ...

Watching the video endeared me quickly to your story, although without it I wouldn't have understood the part about cheese and tommy-toes toasties. Also I am a bit confused at ...

A short, short story partially based off my real neighbors. Is the title too weak? Let me know what you think. The woman upstairs is vacuuming again. It is the ...

Good work. You kept me interested the whole story. I like your characters although I think the name Merlyn is not very original. And I really like the specters, very ...

I really liked it, very exciting. You use very good descriptions and I only found a few minor things that need correcting. Dara, move , ” her mother scolded when ...

Okay, you wanted brutal honesty. I'm not really quite sure about this. It seems interesting enough, but your settings are not very well developed and I don't see a strong ...

Good job!! I really like the descriptive language you use when describing the Queen's eyes. Milantis is such a creative name. You did a really good job developing your characters ...

I'm not sure if this is the end of chapter two or not. But this is all I have written for now, so we will see how the flow goes. ...

Reviews!! I need reviews!! More to come very soon! Amarie reached the entrance to the Tarasova Forest just before sunset. Rather than setting up camp out in the open meadow ...

Disclaimer: I am about to be brutally honest, please do not take it as a personal attack, but rather as constructive criticism. "I'm not in the marsh, am I?" he ...

thanks for the speedy reply and thanks for the PM!

This is such a good piece. Your characters are well developed with strong descriptions so that I can actually visualize them in my head. I love the words you use ...